Comments on: Escape http://sarahflanigan.com/2007/05/28/escape/ Poery & stories of life Wed, 08 Feb 2012 07:55:58 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7.1 hourly 1 By: spasmicallyperfect http://sarahflanigan.com/2007/05/28/escape/comment-page-1/#comment-3928 spasmicallyperfect Thu, 14 Jun 2007 21:46:35 +0000 http://sarahflanigan.wordpress.com/2007/05/28/escape/#comment-3928 Ok, I am back and read the whole thing. The whole part until the narrator gets back to the house is absolutely great. Not only does the 'what on earth is the matter question' linger but the patience with which that part is written traps the reader in that same empty building getting more and more scared. I am trying to 'buy' the end. I am not sure why it's not quite working for me, whether I find it odd that it takes him/her so long to suspect the 'them' or because the first part seems so everyday and the second part starts me thinking about aliens or because there too many unanswered questions at the end. Also the balance - it seems that I suffer with the narrator for so long and then he/she slipps through my fingers without me even having the time to wrap my head around it. I have read stories like these, the open ended ones. Some of them I've liked, others I didn't. I think this one was a bit too open for my taste, but nevertheless, it kept me reading and was like usual well written. <strong>hi spaz, i appreciate your honesty here. it was an experiment - two writers seeing if they could meld their styles into one. i'm thinking too that maybe the premise was too big for the story. it might be that it should have been longer or even a novel or something. others have made comments to that effect. sarah </strong> Ok,
I am back and read the whole thing.
The whole part until the narrator gets back to the house is absolutely great. Not only does the ‘what on earth is the matter question’ linger but the patience with which that part is written traps the reader in that same empty building getting more and more scared.
I am trying to ‘buy’ the end. I am not sure why it’s not quite working for me, whether I find it odd that it takes him/her so long to suspect the ‘them’ or because the first part seems so everyday and the second part starts me thinking about aliens or because there too many unanswered questions at the end. Also the balance - it seems that I suffer with the narrator for so long and then he/she slipps through my fingers without me even having the time to wrap my head around it.
I have read stories like these, the open ended ones. Some of them I’ve liked, others I didn’t. I think this one was a bit too open for my taste, but nevertheless, it kept me reading and was like usual well written.

hi spaz,
i appreciate your honesty here. it was an experiment - two writers seeing if they could meld their styles into one. i’m thinking too that maybe the premise was too big for the story. it might be that it should have been longer or even a novel or something. others have made comments to that effect.
sarah

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