Sarah Flanigan - Poetry Simply Put

Apr 01 2008

Looking

Posted at 2:20 pm under Poetry, original fiction

Looking for my future
within the rocky path

The sky reaches out
and sings its morning prayer

The sun hugs my soul
and pulls at my thoughts

Predator black birds crowd the view
searching hapless prey

Today, I am not their
victim.

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purefnevylon 01 Apr 2008 at 3:47 pm 1

It’s always nice to keep the old shotgun handy. Keep the birds at bay.

good advice, i do need shotgun, now that you mention it. sarah
Alion 01 Apr 2008 at 9:55 pm 2

I love the confidence in this one ~

thanks, sweetie.
sarah
ozymandiazon 02 Apr 2008 at 10:30 am 3

that’s a good sign

it could be, eh?
sarah
krkbakeron 03 Apr 2008 at 5:06 pm 4

very strong ending, also like the alliteration, sky, sun, soul, searching. good.

i love it when you notice my alliteration, kim. sarah
con 05 Apr 2008 at 11:21 pm 5

The second strophe really moves me.
i like the idea of a singing sky.

There is determination in this poem i admire.

yes, there is. and it’s new to me. thanks for noticing.
sarah
Joon 06 Apr 2008 at 7:50 pm 6

“The sun hugs my soul and pulls at my thoughts…” oh what a lyrical bit of prose! You truly have an artists mind and its been a pleasure exploring it here!

hello jo & welcome!
what sweet, kind words. thank you so much. and isn’t it wonderful when the sun does hug your soul?
sarah
Deborah Registeron 10 Apr 2008 at 11:11 am 7

Short and Sweet. To the point!
Well done.

ps…where do you get your pictures to use?

hi deborah,
i got my pictures from google images or yahoo.
sarah
sheaon 18 Apr 2008 at 1:04 pm 8

I love this one.

hi shea,
thank you and welcome. hope to see you again.
sarah